2/10 for grammar, style and content.
From the top:
"41-year-old"
As this is news you don't necessarily need to give the precise, i.e. time, day, month and year of the accident. Just "it happened on Sunday, September 9" or what have you.
Who says "It is reported"? Did it happened or not, and who says so? The police? A witness?
Stop writing like a policeman giving evidence in court, viz: "It is reported", "...in the process of overtaking", "...a collision subsequently occurred" etc. It's hard to read, uses odd language and looks as though it's been lifted from a press release.
"Impacted" is not exactly in common usage is it?
How many people were on the Harley? One? Then how were they thrown from "their motorcycle"?
I could go on, but I simply suggest you re-do the whole thing and I'll have another look later.
If you want your site to be taken seriously and used as a reliable source of news, then I suggest you start by taking your journalism a bit more seriously first.
Posted: 11/09/2007 at 09:00